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Lost in the Forest
Here is my narrative work from Term Two. I really enjoyed writing this because it helped me express my ideas and thoughts.
Thanks for reading my writing, I would love your feedback :-)
Lost In the Forest!!!
“Yey, I can’t believe we’re here”, mumbled Isabella. The sky was black and filled with stars and the night was very cold and spooky.The wind blew the pine trees from side to side. The humongous moon was floating in the sky. The snow was everywhere. Isabella and Kristine were best friends since kindergarten. Isabella was 18, she had long blonde curly hair and green eyes. Kristine was 18, she had long black straight hair and blue eyes. Kristine was a little bit taller than Isabella and they were both clever and brave.
The girls found a good spot for their camp. They set up their tent and made a plan for the next day. After that, they crawled into their tent and told each other scary stories. They felt very tired and suddenly they fell fast asleep. Late at night, a huge wind disturbed the girls silent dream and the next moment, the girls tent got blown away followed by all their camping materials, and that woke them up with fear.! The girls were very shocked when they saw what had happened.
The girls had no where to hide and felt hopeless. They decided to defeat fear and try get on to save themselves. They found out it very disappointing when they couldn’t locate their maps and their phones.The girls now found confidence in themselves, even though that they’re absolutely lost. They tried their best to continue on searching for luck when they finally found their jackets, some food, water bottle, matches and a flashlight. They lost everything else. The night was cold and windy. It was so dark that the girls decided to make a fire. “Let’s collect some wood to make a fire” (suggested) Kristine. “That’s a good idea” replied Isabella. The girls collected some wood and stacked them in a pile so that Kristine could start to lit light a fire and luckily it worked. The fire glowed beautifully like a golden egg and the black smoke went up in the dark blue sky. The girls felt very warm and through the night they fell asleep beside the fire.
The girls woke up to a very peaceful day. The sun was shining brightly in the sky. The birds were flying across the sky. Kristine and Isabella were now brave enough to stay there for longer with the hope that their dad would be looking for them. While the girls were eating their chips they heard their name being called. They saw people appearing from the woods. Isabella immediately recognized her father’s voice. “You found us dad!” said Isabella. The girls were full of joy and the girls were saved.
What I find tricky are…………….
Past tense
Getting ideas
Use interesting words
What helped me most with my learning are………
Success Criteria
WALT.
My next step are……………
Writing Past Tense from the beginning to the ending.
Thanks for reading my writing, I would love your feedback :-)
Friday, 29 May 2015
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